Subject: Self-introductory Letter
Dear Miss Gan,
I am writing you this letter with the intent to introduce myself, Nicole Vale, one of your students from Group 2 in Effective Communication Class. I graduated with a diploma in Civil Engineering with Business in Singapore Polytechnic (SP) with a scholarship from Building and Construction Authority. After graduation, I served my scholarship bond with Sembcorp as a site engineer.
My goal for studying in this module is to develop technical writing skills and to improve my communication skills. My long-term aspiration is to be a great engineer that handles projects both internationally and locally. As for my short-term aspiration, I aspire to be a professional engineer. Through this module, I would like to attain a better command in my English writing and at the same time, I would love to learn how to speak in a more concise manner.
My weaknesses are not being able to properly express myself through communication with the right words and the lack of reporting writing skills. I tend to repeat myself and use examples when I interact with my peers so that they can understand me. I hope that with your help, I will be able to improve in these areas.
As for my strength, I interact well with my peers and professionals alike. In my time as a site engineer, I often had to interact with people of different backgrounds such as workers, supervisor and management which developed my interpersonal skills. In my experience, oral communication is very important as it help communicate with people of different background.
In conclusion, I hope to learn and improve my overall communication skill as I believe that this is will greatly benefit me in the future.
I look forward to coming to class.
Thank you.
Best Regards,
Nicole Vale
CVE, Group 2
Nicole Vale 
Dear Nicole,
Communication sounds like a crucial aspect of your work scope, but with your outgoing personality, I’m sure you will have no problems conversing with others! With your prior work experience, I’m sure you will have plenty to bring to the table in each class.
Take note of your pronouns – “to be a great engineer WHO handles projects…” (not that). You also need to be aware of your Subject Verb Agreement usage – “oral communication is very important as it HELPS US (subject) communicate with…”
Best,
Gan Sujia
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Dear Nicole,
Communication sounds like a crucial aspect of your work scope, but with your outgoing personality, I’m sure you will have no problems conversing with others! With your prior work experience, I’m sure you will have plenty to bring to the table in each class.
Take note of your pronouns – “to be a great engineer WHO handles projects…” (not that). You also need to be aware of your Subject Verb Agreement usage – “oral communication is very important as it HELPS US (subject) communicate with…”
Best,
Gan Sujia
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Dear NIcole,
You do still have trouble finding the right words for the right time and situation.
I still find joy assisting you and helping you getting the correct words and finishing your sentences.
You did what was required despite your busy schedule being the president of SMC.
Hope you had fun in this journey and learned new knowledge.
Regards,
Alvin
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Hi Nicole,
I am glad that you are on the path to achieving your goal to become a professional engineer. Your introduction letter is detailed and i liked how you talked about your short and long term aspirations as it shows that you have clear mindset for your career.
However, some sentence structuring can be improved in your letter.
1) “I have a couple of communication weaknesses; one is having difficulties expressing myself using the right words, the other is in writing reports.” can be better written as “My weaknesses are not being able to properly express myself through communication and lack of reporting writing skills. ”
2) “I was in constant communication with people of different backgrounds.” can be better phrased as ” I often had to interact with people of different backgrounds “.
Regards,
Tang Kak Yong
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Dear Nicole,
I’m sure you would be a great engineer in the future. Your experience as a site engineer would prove to be valuable. Overall, your presentation skills is very good and I really enjoyed your team’s presentation. You are confident in presenting and delivered your points clearly.
A point to take note for your self-introduction letter:
1) “very important as it helps communicate” instead of “very important as it help communicate”
Overall, I feel your self-introduction letter is very well-written.
Regards,
Syamim
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Hello Nicole,
I enjoyed reading your introduction letter and I was pleased to see you have a goal in mind to be a great engineer. However there are some sentence in your letter you can rephrased it, like what Kak Yong mentioned.
Cheers,
Hairul
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